Tuesday, 30 May 2017

The strange lady

“Weee!” I joyfully scream, “Wait, what's that strange feeling?”
 I choke with worry, my insides tighten, I swallow - trembling what's happening?
Her curly, fuzzy white hair sticks up on end and with her torn jeans, she edges towards me. My heart's thumping as she takes a step closer, and closer.
‘What should I do? What should I do?’ I think. Suddenly her evil smoke surrounds me in a dark stinky cloud. I take a step back, and another, and another. Suddenly, she takes a step closer, and closer, then all of a sudden someone shouts out…
“Get away from her!”
 The lady freezes like she is under some type of magic spell. Then she finally turns around and looks at my brother, and they start to argue, and argue, and argue, then finally they stop. She looked at us and said…
 “You have ten seconds to go, 10….9…...8…7…” By the time she gets to six we are out of sight running for our lives!

In my writing I think that my punctuation is halfway between relational and extended abstract. I have placed myself there because I have used many types of punctuation correctly in my writing I know how, when and why I need to use them in my writing, and I can help others with their punctuation. I also think that I am relational when I am using my bright sparks words because I have used many bright sparks words and they connect well together to evoke emotion and appeal to the senses. I think that my next steps are to use more bright sparks words to make the reader feel like they are in the writing and this is what is happening around them.

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